The dialogue itself isn't bad, but it's lost in all the eye-rolling, grimacing, archness, and other bits of business. That added to the emotional tags punching up almost every line made them seem like drag queens putting on a show. I only made it halfway through.
I think a little direction goes a long way with these two. especially if you want their voices to be heard and their dialogue to shine.
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Date: 2006-04-22 09:08 pm (UTC)From:The dialogue itself isn't bad, but it's lost in all the eye-rolling, grimacing, archness, and other bits of business. That added to the emotional tags punching up almost every line made them seem like drag queens putting on a show. I only made it halfway through.
I think a little direction goes a long way with these two. especially if you want their voices to be heard and their dialogue to shine.
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Date: 2006-04-22 09:43 pm (UTC)From:no subject
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